DARK TALES (Eight of a short series)

Posted by SOUL AFLAME (The bosom of nature Canada &, United Kingdom) on 29 March 2011 in Cityscape & Urban and Portfolio.

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So, I have finally found a suitable home for my work and have started a new personal website:

DESPITE STRAIGHT LINES which can be found here:

http://despitestraightlines.com/

Todays post is the first one on my new site, and from now on all new material will appear on that site, with my favourite pieces from here also moving across with new processing, tweaked words and larger format. Many thanks to everyone for your visits and encouragement, and I hope to talk to you in the near future.
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DARK TALES (Eight of a short series)

WHEN A MAN DIES WITHIN


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Gazing down at the familiar lines of the white cigarette packet that he clasped in his right hand, eyes crumpled up a little against the invasive brightness of the crisp early Spring morning light, David could not help but manage a slightly wry smile at the warning sign printed in bold lettering just under the lip of the flip open top. 'Smoking can kill', a rather beautifully graphic small colour photograph emblazoned upon the rear cover as he momentarily flipped the pack over in his hand, depicting the aftermath of years of carnage within the confines of one addicts mouth. David thumbed the roof of his own mouth with his right hand, still gripping the cigarette between his index and third second finger as he tapped his upper front teeth and ascertained that they were correctly in situ. Placing the cigarette into the moist confines of his mouth he drew on the tiny object, sucking in a stream of gloriously addictive chemicals infused and entwined with beautiful harmony, Benzine, Formaldehyde, acetone and ammonia blended with arsenic, hydrogen cyanide and tar, what a sumptuous concoction to calm the nerves and brace a man at the beginning of yet another fast paced day in the rat race commuter zone of the city.
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At his feet lay a collection of discarded nicotine butts, enjoyed to the very last, the filters bent and crushed upon impact with the floor, dropped from height and stabbed with the under sole of David's perfectly shiny and bulled up black Italian leather designer shoes. Back arched against the wooden window plinth of the shuttered backstreet printing house, David stood resplendent in his city garb, clothed for combat with the corporate crew, two piece Saville row tailored suit and silk shirt capped by a loud and vibrant hand stitched mauve tie, Armani belt with silver buckle that glistened in the morning sunlight and neatly cropped mousy brown hair, his face closely shaven and bathed in musky oils that renewed and reinvigorated those dying skin cells that every man of a certain age fights a daily battle with. Ten minutes from the office, a freshly brewed caramel macchiato with extra topping in his left hand, from one of the many Starbucks seemingly on every corner of every street in each and every major city of the Western world these days. Placing his lips over the tiny flow hole of the white plastic cap placed securely over the drinks cup, emblazoned with vibrant corporate motifs and one of those dinky little brown corrugated slip on hand grips to prevent inadvertent burns to ones hand, he drank a gulp of the tasty beverage, which had cooled down considerably during the smoking of his fifth cigarette in twenty minutes.
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First the cooling flavour of the whipped synthetic cream atop of the drink entered his mouth, seducing the papillae and taste receptor cells situated in the upper surface of his tongue and soft palate, followed by the warmth and delicate caramel flavour of the luke warm coffee which flowed smoothly through his mouth and into the welcome of his stomach. The cup drained, David placed it with his left hand back onto the wooden window plinth, dusty from the city debris, building works and fallout of daily life as the army of workers passed by in their droves. Placing the empty packet of Malboro cigarettes onto the plinth to his right, he pushed his arched back off the railing and pulled the base fronts of his jacket down, dabbing both sides with his hands to smooth any creases. The boss was always fastidious about the appearance of his staff, reprimands dished out with daily monotony to all and sundry caught with shirts not tucked in or shoes not polished to within an inch of their lives. David considered that it must have been the military influence on his distant past that had left it's mark on a man who seemed never to have had a moments fun in his sad little life.
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For a few moments, David glanced at the passers by, dreary faces, fixed stares, down turned lips on the way to a myriad of workplaces across the length and breadth of the city of opportunity, the city of dreams, A young fresh faced whiz kid with a Kensington accent and carefully orchestrated streaked hair passed by, cell phone to right ear, barking words of a conversation that he wanted everyone else to hear and be impressed by. Share dealing, money making, subservient recipient on the other end of the line fawning to his vocal commands as he blended into the oncoming flow of people like a tiny prop forward felled by the advancing scrum in a rugby match. An itsy bitsy size zero sauntered past, tiny footsteps barely registering upon the cement paving slabs as her minuscule form and painfully gaunt features stared at the array of people queuing for the coffee shop, and a black dude with iPod earpiece tapping out a tinny drum and bass beat of some obscure and soon to disband through apathy band, slunk past with a hip induced swagger and ill fitting jeans with an arse that virtually dragging on the ground. David raised his left arm, pulling back the jacket and shirt sleeves to reveal the big Omega watch face that showed nine in the morning. Time to begin another day just like any other. Only this was a very different day in the heart of the city, one that would not go unnoticed.
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Right hand reaching inwards towards the inner breast pocket of his jacket, David's palm settled around the handle of the small black Beretta PX4 sub compact handgun that he'd easily purchased for a few hundred pounds from a friend of a friend who had contacts in the know and spurious advertisements on Ebay where decommissioned weaponry could be 'Easily converted for authenticity of the collector'. The weapon of divine retribution felt so cool to the touch falling to his right side as he twisted his head and neck to flex the muscles which audibly crunched. Moving forwards into the jostling crowds, David said good morning to an oncoming gent with a pin striped uniform and look of bewilderment as the three inch barrel met his gaze and a single bullet was expelled through the air into his temple. Before the hapless first victim had fallen, David was continuing without a missing stride, through a side alleyway as screams erupted from shocked passers by now long behind him. Tunnel vision, eyes searching as the victims streamed across his line of view, David pivoted around, barrel following the head of a white uniformed restaurant worker, Chinese descent as he scampered from one fire exit door to another across the alleyway, another two shots flying with consummate grace and balletic energy into the unwilling flesh of the mans skull. In the doorway, a second man, thick set, holding a tray of freshly basted chickens in his hands, stood frozen to the spot, eyes staring straight at David's. David raised a left index finger to his mouth, pursing his lips as if to tell the man to keep quiet, before moving onwards into the opening streets before him. Five more bullets covetted the air as three more victims fell like human dominoes, a pretty young twenty something woman with ocean blue eyes and mismatched dark eyebrows to her over dyed blonde hair, a jogger with the passing scent of sweaty testosterone as droplets glistened and leapt in all directions from his muscle packed running torso, and an out of sorts punk with shocking pink hair, thick black eyeliner just like his dear old grandmother probably still applies and elephant bone ear graffiti, who screamed like a stuck pig as the bullet pierced his upper torso causing him to spin on his feet before falling to the ground clutching the entry wound as his final breaths spurted out.
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Moving out into the main drag, a road away from his place of work for the last twenty odd years, David peppered the passers by with random shells that dazed and grazed, finishing off two more bodies that lay writhing in blood on the unforgiving concrete floor, before aiming at a single mother leaning over the grey plastic and chromed metal handles of her child buggy in which nestled her two year old brat, outside a confectioners store just yards from his workplace. The woman straightened up and stared back at David with a terrified expression, frozen to the spot like an animal caught in the headlights of an oncoming vehicle. The child screamed, more for the taste of chocolate treats than any understanding of the perilous situation his mother now faced as David tilted his head to the left, gazing into the woman's terrified brown eyes before raising his pistol towards her head and pulling the trigger, which clicked to signify that the thirteen bullet magazine had reached it's conclusion. She would have died, he would have killed her, the brat too, if not for the limitations of the tiny hand gun and the necessity of both time and haste. He smiled and waved the pistol as if to tell her to run, whilst reaching into his pocket and retrieving a second loaded magazine which slipped effortlessly within the gun handle with a satisfying clunk once in place.
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Chaos behind him, David stood before the giant glass and polished chromed entrance doors to Smyth and sons near Piccadilly circus. “Your future in our hands” read the experted sign printed black words etched across the tops of the entrance as David smiled and entered, despatching the security guard with a single shot as he reached the brass elevators at the rear of the lobby, pressed the white plastic button and entered before allowing the arriving occupants to make their exit. A momentary decision allowed the pretty Asian girl in the short red skirt clutching a blue file close to her chest, a vending machine repair guy in uniform with his identification badge hanging from his neck lanyard and a spectacled lady with mousy brown hair and a look on her face suggesting that she had never had a days fun in her entire life, to walk away with their lives. A calmness swept over David's mind as he thumbed the elevator button, floor thirteen, and the location of his tiny desk amongst the hordes of likewise crammed into the cattle shed confines for so many years of his working life prior to his dismissal just one week earlier. Thought's of how humiliated he had felt being outshone by Philips and Robertson's presentations, the new kids on the block with savage intent, delusions of grandeur and such a youthful appetite to establish a name for themselves at any cost to those who they deemed as rivals. A life's work down the pan, hopes and dreams, aspirations of greater heights, a home and family life with the trappings of contentment brushed aside like the trinkets on his desk as he was ordered to gather up his belongings and never darken the doorstep of the building in which he had spent twenty years of late night's building portfolio's, protecting assets, courting the key clients, kissing corporate ass and being treated like something that the boss had stepped in and did not much care for.
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All for nothing, as the elevator door pinged, coming to an abrupt halt with David's stomach taking nano seconds to catch up with the forces of gravity. Bright lights, the hubbub of office life, startled faces as he walked through the centre pathway, a mind so focussed on what he was about to do that everything seemed to haze and move into slow motion. Gun raised, seeking out the perpetrators of his personal demise, David shot Anthony Phillips between the eyes, the body slumping to the ground as he turned and hit a terrified Bill Robertson who had tried in vane to make a bid for the fire exit door before succumbing to two rounds that blasted through his neck and face. David continued, sniping as he walked purposeful strides, not a care in the world for those he took down, no rhyme nor reasoning behind each kill, just the anger at his peers for standing by and watching his demise, the inner turmoil and self loathing, the feelings of betrayal as he lined up the two instigators of his downfall within the gun sight and fired twice into each cowering carcass, limbs flailing wildly as the desks shunted sideways and a nest of important documents flew into the air like doves of peace given their ultimate freedom. And up ahead the door to Robert Smyth's office, the great man himself standing in the doorway with a look of bewilderment on his fat little face as he turned and reached for the internal phone located on his solid oak captain's table behind him. David pushed onwards, entering behind his ex boss, loosing off a bullet into his back, Smyth instinctively reaching for the wound with his right hand whilst dropping the phone and slumping into his dark wood and green leather captains chair, adrenalin coursing through his veins as he looked up at David's blank expression and sinister eyes. David raised the gun sure and slow, blank expression, a fearsome stare as he fired two more rounds into Smyth's body before turning around to view the carnage in the office behind him. Cowering bodies, some heading for the exits like stampeding cattle, treading on fellow workmates who had fallen in the crush, the sounds of Police sirens in different parts of the city heading ever closer.
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All went eerily quite for a few seconds as David thought about the life he once had, red and tearful eyes staring up and around the tiny dimensions of the room in which he had spent so many wasted years of subserviance and tedium, the room of his very aspirations that was never to be. A slight smile forming upon his lips, the pain of his demise, the realisation of some of the dreadful deeds that he had done this very morning now beginning to dawn upon a troubled conscience as he placed the barrel of the Beretta into the warm confines of his mouth, sweaty fingers wriggling and writhing on the hot to the touch metal trigger. After a brief pause of quiet reflection and thoughts of his own wife and family, he aimed the barrel low and flat in his mouth and without further hessitation managed two single shots which severed his spinal column at the point it met with the base of his skull, before his body hit the ground, a spray of bone fragments, brain matter and blood splattering the desk and contents behind him as he fell. Life can change in an instant, the mind can become blurred with rage and humiliation, for you can push a man just so far before he snaps, in whatever way he feels appropriate. The Understanding, contemplation, empathy that we feel or that indeed we do not, matter little when the human brain reacts to a given situation. And in the cold light of day, you can take anything away from a man except the belief he has in his own inner self and his pride, because without them, he dies within and truly has nothing left to live for......

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Written March 28th/29th 2011
Photograph taken on March 17th 2011 in the early morning in the backstreets near Covent Garden, London, Engalnd.

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Nikon D700 65mm 1/25s f/6.3 iso200
Nikkor AF-S 28-300mm f/3.5-6.3 G ED IF VRII. UV filter

12.18mb RAW file at 14bit RGB, converted to TIFF 8bit/Jpeg and processed using Adobe Photoshop Elements 8 software

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(Photograph and words: © SOUL AFLAME/PAUL WILLIAMS rights reserved)

BOOK NEWS.....BOOK NEWS.....BOOK NEWS.....BOOK NEWS.....BOOK NEWS.....BOOK NEWS.....BOOK NEWS
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"DESPITE STRAIGHT LINES", was published on Blurb books on June 10th 2010
'WHEN ALL IS SAID AND DONE' was published on Blurb books on September 18th 2010
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Both books can be viewed on line here: http://www.blurb.com/user/SOULAFLAME
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I will be rewriting and publishing a short novel written in 2008 called 'BLOODSTONE'.. Thanks to everyone who has followed my work and offered valuable support, inspiration and advice along the way.

sunstone_maria from California, United States

beautiful quality, love the contrast here and fantastic clarity!! absolutely one of your best!

29 Mar 2011 5:52am

cristoF from montbéliard, France

excellent travail ,bravo à toi!!

29 Mar 2011 7:09am

Marie LC from Entre montagnes et Bretagne, France

To smoke kills it is doubtless for it that you opted for the black and the white, the colors of mourning. LOL!

29 Mar 2011 8:43am

Stephen from Canberra, Australia

Powerful story - excellent build up to the action with all the details - cigarettes and coffee - that start the working day. His victims are also innocently going about similar small moments of their everyday lives. Interesting that this character - despite his loss of pride - still has the daily routine to give meaning to his life. It is not much - but no less than his victims share. The excellent photo you show here is so expressive of not only his own life - but the lives of those around him.

29 Mar 2011 11:00am

@Stephen: Stephen, I cannot thank you enough for giving up some valuable time from your daily schedule to read my story today, that means a great deal to me.Also thanks so much for seeing in my work something more than just a photo to browse, rather a combination of words and imagery that I strive so hard to create. I wanted to build the story in a short space of time and surprise the reader as a seemingly ordinary man goes off the rails and loses control over his life and actions and commits an attrocity that so many dismiss as the work of an evil man, when in actual fact it is simply a cry of frustration, a retaliation, a retribution that sadly goes out of control as the mind becomes warped with anger and denial. It's a fairly common thing, the world over with extremes like this happening more than some would care to admit.


I really delighted that this piece worked in your opinion and value your feedback immensely. The photograph really sparked the storyline, and I could just see the man calmly drinking his coffee and smoking that final cigarette before going completely out of control, with loss of life and destruction to so many lives and families, including his own. Thank you for your comments and for contributing to this post.

Rick from Toronto, Canada

David should have eaten that gun, alone in a room, instead of laying waste to innocent lives in his cowardly anger-fueled "justification" rampage... but these horrific events play out all the time, all over the world, and as such it requires a brutally descriptive unflinching flow of a write to bring it directly into focus as is this package of cancer sticks perfectly crisp within the vignetting. A riveting, raw, ugly, truthful write. You served the essence of detail very well with the ultra-descriptives. Not easy to stomach but very well done; it may not sound like a compliment, but it definitely is. Have a great week, Paul.

29 Mar 2011 2:40pm

@Rick: I could not have asked for a finer response, Rick and thanks so much for taking the time to read this story, as hard hitting as it is, and was intended to be. I wanted to lure the reader in and then hit them with the brutality of the actions that unfold in a situation where the levels of control in the human brain cease to have a meaning and place and instinct takes over as all common decency falls to the lure of retribution and inner turmoil. I hoped the piece would feel real and raw, uncomfortable and yet rivetting, a painful slice of reality for some in this frenetic world.

I've bitten the bullet and finally started my first ever personal website which is now just a couple of hours old. This piece is the opener on my new website, DESPITE STRAIGHT LINES over at http://despitestraightlines.com/ I will finally be placing all new material and some of my best work from Soul Aflame over there. It's all a bit daunting at the moment, but hopefully I'll master it soon enough and it gives me the chance to show my images in greater size and detail which pleases me.

Rick from Toronto, Canada

CONGRATULATIONS are in order. Well done, sir. I was hoping you would find something more suitable to your unique offerings, and as a Wordpress blogger I wasn't sure of that site for you and kept my mouth shut about it. You can now present your work to a higher standard, and that can only be rewarding and exciting. I shall bookmark you! Cheers.

29 Mar 2011 3:36pm

@Rick: Manyn thanks Rick, much appreciated.

Francisco Romero from Carbajal de la Legua, Spain

Another great image with a great vignette. Congratulations for your new site. I only hope you keep posting here a selection of your work. I find this place a very convenient format for following the work of the others, in spite of some limitations and the small size of the images. I find yours an inspiring work.

29 Mar 2011 3:51pm

JANINE FROM KENT from United Kingdom

OMG OMG OMG. Paul i just don't know what to say about this piece. Rivetting, awesome, gory,exiting,and sadly true to life.The attention to detail again and the way you built the story up had me on the edge of my seat.This is you at your absolute best. I could'nt read it quick enough whilst he was going on his rampage.That was without a doubt the most exciting story of yours i've ever read, and another simple everyday object that we would all pass by and look on as litter, you manage to make it a work of art.Remember this morning you were doubting yourself as to if you were really any good at all. Well my friend i told you this morning you were talented.But now that seems far too tame a word to describe you. You truly are bloody marvelous. I can't tell you how it makes me feel when you write something as awesome as this.It brings tears to my eyes as i'm sooooo proud of you. I'm sure i must get more excited than you.So pleased to see that you have done something about Despite straight lines already, and i wish you all the luck in the world with this new site.By the way, i'm definatley going to take your advice and pin you down and make you do "Bloodstone" now.The people who have followed this series and enjoyed it, don't know what they are missing.Well done you and i'll see you in the morning.

29 Mar 2011 6:30pm

@JANINE FROM KENT: I am so thrilled by this comment J, and I really hoped that you would like this piece of writing. I worked very hard to capture the essence of normality crumbling into chaos and carnage, a normal man pushed to the brink who crosses the line and loses all semblance of reason and control. Many thanks for taking the time to read my work today and for your help in nudging me to make the jump to my own personal web domain. So the deed is done and I am busy working on the new site, I hope you will visit and enjoy my work there, a mix of old an d new, and hopefully the chance for me to shine and at last perhaps find favour.... thank you for your support which means the world to me. Oh by the way, the Angel of mercy is already over on the new site.

JANINE FROM KENT from United Kingdom

Yeah, like i would'nt have noticed.I saw it within minutes of it going on there.

29 Mar 2011 7:43pm

Michael from Chester, United Kingdom

A fitting image for a Dark story. I like how the iconic cigarette pack lies forgotten on the ledge picked up by the light.

30 Mar 2011 8:32pm

Elaine Hancock from Rockville, United States

This story brings to mind what has happened so many times in this country. And it is very sad. This was a very powerful story with a lot of emotion. In 2002 for 2 weeks everyone was terrified because 2 snipers were randomly killing people. Everyone was afraid. This story reminded me of that time. Great photo!

31 Mar 2011 8:40pm

@Elaine Hancock: Absolutely, Elaine, a worldwide occurance these days as folk go into meltdown over personal loss or tragedy, or a simple trigger that ignites the spark within. Many thanks for taking the time to read my words.

Enzo from Lausanne, Switzerland

Belle image, comme toujours accompagnée par beau texte. Félicitations pour votre nouveau site web plus adapté à la mise en valeur de la qualité de vos images.

31 Mar 2011 9:44pm

@Enzo: Many thanks Enzo, hope to see you over at DESPITE STRAIGHT LINES at some point, you are very welcome there.

Isidro from Barcelona, Spain

magnifica composición, me gusta la diagonal y la pureza del B&W con un tono y luz impecable,
excelente trabajo!!

1 Apr 2011 9:22am

Wolfen from Villefranche S/S, France

J'aime la composition et 'la patine" de votre prise de vue !! Du beau travail pour moi !!
Bon dimanche

3 Apr 2011 7:41am

Krunal from Mumbai, India

shot

3 Apr 2011 6:28pm

Céline from New York City, United States

Nice b&w !

5 Apr 2011 4:54am

Marcie from Newton, United States

Exquisite b&w. And the stories keep getting better and better. Great work!

5 Apr 2011 7:50pm

martim from Galesburg,Illinois, United States

No Wonder I aappreciate you and your work.l...That was a gripping and sad story...and how many futile lives out there waould like to do the same thing...I believe it is only through personal expression and creativity that one can turn anger into something much more productive.The reception of that creativity needs to be visited often and large.....Today I fully believe that the destruction of the importance fo the ARTS created a Columbine....and an Arizona...yes they are crazy...but they have such negative voices in their head....
I will be contributing to writing with my pictures...I have a whole series fo short vignettes i will be sharing about my students in Juvenile Hall and the larger Jail I worked in..(I was the Adult Education Teacher) On Fridays I brought theater...Music and art intoo the classroom....many of these peopel are nto left brained and they respond well to expressing themselves through aart and Poetry...I also saved some of their works as well as wrote some of my own poetry from the experience.....I truly believe to "KILL " one is not in a rational state of mine...and you depicted this well...and also the "trigger" that seemingly caused the rampage...when essentially it was that ..which is going on in his head....that was the real world....MORE! Bravo! Salud!

7 Apr 2011 3:17pm

@martim: Martim, thanks very much for such an interesting comment and also for taking the time to read my story today. You certainly have a very interesting and rewarding working life by the sound of things and I agree that expression and creativity are vital in rehabilitation with many people. Thanks for your visit.

AMH from Buenos Aires, Argentina

excellent focus and shot. days ago that I come to see and do not know how to express in words how beautiful it is. just beautiful. a big kiss. Alejandra

23 Apr 2011 4:36am

Julie from Easton, United States

Wonderful shot!

27 Apr 2011 3:34pm

luwi from Innsbruck, Austria

it's just a pack of cigarettes but you give personality to a not living thing!

1 May 2011 6:57pm

Theys Roland from Belgium

An admirable composition! , to spend a beautiful day.

11 May 2011 8:13am

Tim from Ft. Worth, United States

nice imagery (drag, blowhole) mirroring the cigs. they are death, anyway. (from one nicotine addict to another...)

12 May 2011 6:45pm

Kavita from Paramaribo, Suriname

Very nice shot. Congrats with your new home and work space

14 May 2011 11:17pm

prarthana from singapore, Singapore

great picture - glad to be back reading your stories and watching your pics! congratulations as always!

12 Jun 2011 5:31am

Véronique from Here & Now, France

La lumière comme une caresse. Très réussi : bravo !

13 Jun 2011 12:24pm

Mimosa from Kedah, Malaysia

An advisory shot in perfect contrast & artistic perspective!

21 Jun 2011 11:54am

noel from Paris, France

Simple subject but great capture
well done for the shot

1 Aug 2011 10:01am

kasra from tabriz, Iran

I love that focus on the cigarette box! :)))

15 Aug 2011 6:56am

rem_la from Villiers, France

superbe cette composition !

17 Aug 2011 8:06pm

Soheil from Tehran, Iran

silver shot
well done

15 Sep 2011 10:16am

noel from paris, France

simple idea but strong picture well done

10 Nov 2011 10:38pm

 

payback
killing-spree
london
cigarettes
office
beretta
humiliation

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